Tuesday, March 29, 2011

The Storms are comming

By Fritz

The storms are comming over sea,over peaks now on the land. Lightning bolts comming from Zuses hand. Evil sperits are comming. And dark and light meet a battle begins!

4 comments:

  1. Fritz, you did a great job allowing the reader to picture what's happening in your poem. I got a clear picture in my head of the scary storm coming. Nice work!
    -Ms. Grojean

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  2. Dear friz,
    I like how you used strong words and I love short storys the shorter the better!I love your story!
    from
    Bea

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  3. Fritz, I agree with Bea...you used very STRONG words in your writing. That is a great way of capturing your audience. Way to write!

    Love, Mrs. Armstrong

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  4. I can't wait to here more about the battle!
    I agree with Bea too!


    Nice work,
    Katie

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